Tuesday, July 14, 2009

Bedside Thought



There is dwelling
In this moment of mist
with some pondering
on my silly dreams list

I lay back aside
Into The shadow shaping
coming Of this gizmo's light
and some mindless aiming

It all started from Nothing
and It all has ended so soon
sooner than I thought it to be
Into a Big Empty subtle balloon





Hasratein hain hazaar
Sataane k liye

Gum hain hazaar
Rulane k liye...

Andhere ki is chamak mein laga hai
Mere Tute sapno ka bazaar
sajaane k liye...

aur kuch aadhey Likhey alwaaz
pade hain Bistar k kinaare
meri ruaasi si aankhon ko puri raat

Jagaane k liye...

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( P.S. - With This post I start a series of poetries on My blog... A series that Highlights The aspect of My persona of a Night Crawler! I stayed Online till 2 in the morning most of the nights from Mid June onwards... after 2 a.m. when I logged off... I wrote these three poems(in 3 nights somewhere in between these days, when I was publishing my stories) !! which I would now be sharing with ya all! 'Bedside thought' is the first one amongst them.
Across the years as I grew Up I completely have forgotten the existence of a proper night sleep...I mostly close my eyes at early morning to have a snap! some of my nights over the past few weeks have been utterly painful as always, and forgive me If I do highlight the negativity of those in my verses but I assure you that There is a hidden optimism in between the words... try to gid that out if you can! )

(P.P.S - chaandni Raatein... Sab jag soye... Hum jaagein... Taaron se kare baatein)

27 comments:

PULKIT said...

hope u liked the stories!
trilogy was over a post before the last one but I squeezed one light post in between!
that Kiddo waali story!
:D
Hope all smiled with it!
I wanted to make a light space for this next tri-post series to start off cos many of these verses will be real personal, deep and might be depressing too for many...or motivating...?? who knows!
Its a perception!
the way we take them and what one understands with it :)
I promise the presence of optimism but it will be tricky to search for it :)

with ocean of love and universe of blessings!
Urs always!
PULKIT!


(pls provide feedback and comments as always! Love ya all )

Brosreview said...

ENGLISH VERSION: The feel is not that quite strong in this one. No, I am not comparing it with your previous works. I never do that. I am just seeing this as a solo project. I fear, it is the second and the third stanzas/verses that are letting it down.

Also, you can avoid mistakes such as "sooner then I thought it to be". It must be than and not "then".

Good luck!

Arv said...

Even in darkness there is light :)

take care mate... cheers...

pinkZz said...

stories are awesom..!
i must say i feel stories to b better...! n yeah,... wat did u say 2 ma sis,. i mean sahityika.. ? u said 11 yrs n 5th standard.. ahem ahem,..! i m 14 n in 11th,...! according to u mujhe toh 8th mein hona tha naa..
waah ji waah,...
aap apne bachchon ka kitne late admission karaoge.. lolzzz..
kiddin ok ..!
luv ya..!

PULKIT said...

@ Brosreview - it is hollow and feel is missing, the thought left me soon before it actually got a shape in words.... thats what the poem signified!
"focus the last 4 lines"

thanks for not comparing it with previous works, hug to u for being understanding! :) I am glad I have a reader like you who understand the fact that I am a writer of phases :) there is a constant high and low movement in terms of good and bad work :)
U pointed that the second and third para let it down...well It started witha random though process!
1st para - outlines the surrounding and current status of mind!
second and third laid out the absense of a vacant and meaningless non deep thought!

and the HINDI VERSE - explained the reason behind this absense of depth!
:)


hey bro... thanks for the comment and yeah "then" and "than" have been corrected now :)

tc regards!
PULKIT
god bless ya!

PULKIT said...

@ Arv - thanks sir for commenting and following too!
Thanks :)
hope to see ya around!!

PULKIT said...

@ Pinkzz - hey vedu,
stories are out for a break! as I want to come up with something fresh regarding stories so just a little break...they will be back soon!!

:D u read the reply to sahityika :D
????

he he he! I was in 17 when I was in 12th!
I calculated from something like that!
main apne bacho ka admission karane se pehle unki choti bua se ...yani ki tumse pooch lunga OK! :P :) :D

Love ya loads sis!
U mean a lot
thanks for being there always!

lostmermaid said...

I loved your blog .. first time here but it feels so homely .. will be back soon :)

PULKIT said...

@ Lostmermaid - Thanks! I am glad you felt this way :)
I visited urs back and it was good too :)
tc, hope to see ya here again

priyanka said...

hey pulkit sorry couldnt be on the blog last time but to tell u whether i m here on this blog or not but i love reading ur post never missed any post of urs so far..........hey bhai i enjoyed this as well........well take care enjoy n take a good sleep from now on
miss u loads of love n god bless u

(¯`•._.•[Raaji]•._.•´¯) said...

I love the short urdu poem! :-)

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Gigi said...

Great Post.

BlossomBlue said...

hi pulkit.. Nice start dude. I can imagine u sittin at night n scribbling *I mean typing* Ur thoughts. N late night satisfied with after u r done with it.

Nice poem, Dreams list,gizmo's light everything makes sense to me.. N ur pps is equally brill !!

PULKIT said...

@ priyanka - hey sweetu! dont say sorry and all yaar!
its ok :)
yeah! I will try to sleep... but frnakly speaking I havent slept in past 45 days for some reason :(
will let ya know someday soon!

PULKIT said...

@ Raaji - thanks for loving it
keep visiting!
have a gr8 day dear!!

PULKIT said...

@ Raaji - Have followed it dear :)
will be reading ur blog regularly now :)

PULKIT said...

@ Gigi - thanks dear for liking!
I visited ur blog too

PULKIT said...

@ Blossomblue - of all the comments that I got on this post, this was the best!
thanks for being caring enough to understand the actual state that I was in while writing this down!
thanks for being understandin enough to see the person behind the poem too!
thanks keep visiting!!
:)

Butterfly Thoughts said...

from where do u get all this bhari bharkam thoughts and words. u seem to be so young for all this senti things. but nevertheless its sweet but gives a pain somewhere in ur heart the title seems to be good. Keep it up.

pinkZz said...

u mean a lot to me too bro !

Dhanya said...

Even if I am not an Urdu expert or anything, I just loved the poem! :)

PULKIT said...

@ butterfly - I have grown way too fast!
thats the biggest concern in my life presently!!

PULKIT said...

@ pinkzz - :)

PULKIT said...

@ Dhanya - Thanks dhanya! :) M glad u liked it

swati said...

tremendous work pulkit..i wonder at such young age u write wid so much of pain..but as its said tat a moment is enaf to fill ones life wid pain..
n most of ur posts depicts it n tat too in a very significant way..

swati said...

i read ur post "a princess love story" wantd to comment thr but cudnt do so due to sme technical prblm..
im glad i came to ur blog..got to knw tat such good talents do exists on blogs..ur writing skills are amazing..always keep going!!
take care!