Saturday, June 20, 2009

Unbearable Nights (Alfaaz - 5)




Kitni baar kaha tha ki inta pyaar mat dena
Ki uske nashe mein jeene Ki Aadat si ho jaye
ab phir paimaane huye hain khaali
ab phir ruh ko hai teri mohabbat ki hai jarurat
par tum nahi ho! Tum kahin nahi ho!!

Phir Neend nahi aa rahi hai
Phir raat guzarti jaa rahi hai...
tere baare mein sochte hi
Phir aankh dubduba rahi hai...

na tu mujhse dur gayi hai
na maine tujhe khoya hai
par teri kuch din ki judai se hi
Phir dil mera roya hai...

Kitni baar kaha tha ki khud mein itna mat samaane dena
Ki main apni shaqsiyat ke wajood ko mita dun
Ab phir bewajah ki udaasi mein doob rahi hai meri jaan
ab phir saanson ko hai teri mahek ki talab
par tum nahi ho! Tum kahin nahin ho!!

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pyaarek nasha sa!
Ruhek dawa sa!

Gumek adat hai!
Ilaazek deedaar hai!

Intezaarek awaaz ka!
Saharaek raaz ka!

Mohabbatek naam se!
Shayari ek shaam se!

Umeedek paighaam ki!
jaruratek saath ki!

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main – ek unsuljha sawaal hun!
Tum – uska ek maatr jawaab ho!




( PS - Thats the first one of the 3 post series of DARK posts On Love here @ My blog . bookish, and orthodox overemotional aspect of love and Human nature in Life is covered here, Pain and agony adding to the glory and a fire whose heat one enjoys while burning! More to come.. stay tuned! )

( PPS - Hongey Kabhi Hum Juda, Maine ye socha na tha... ye sitam, Tu bata Kyun Hua? Jiya na jaaye... tere bin saathiya! Yaadon mein tu hai, Raat din saathiya)

25 comments:

Phoenix said...

i loved the words they are what suits my mood at the moment...

hey i haven't stopped following you or anything you are on my blog roll so dont worry... actually been really busy of late and net connection too wasnt there.. hence the absence...dont misunderstand me... :)

paramveer said...

HEY i cant say abt 1st n last para as i hate 2 read long lines in poems which give it sm essay touch.


but about mid 2......

u hv reapeted "hai" in consecutive lines...wt abt put them like follow..check out my version

***RE-PULKIT:***

phir neend nahi hai aa rahi
phir raat gujarti hi ja rahi
tere khyalo ke saye mein
phir aankh hai meri dabdaba rahi...

na tu mujse hai duur gai
na mainey tujhko khoya hai
par kuch din ki is judai mein
phir dil ye mera roya hai.....


TIME JYADA THA TO SOCHA EK LAMBI WALI COMMENT LIKHTA HUUN AAJ...HEHE..:););)


PARAMVEER
mypoeticaccent.blogspot.com

Anurag said...

Superb dude ....This shows how much love you have for your writing mann ...You do listen to songs and poetry in general ardently...

Though I am not too sure about the last line "Par tum Nahi ho! Tum kahin nahin ho!" ....Wouldn't it sound better if you cut the "ho" from thr.....Par tum Nahin! Tum Kahin Nahin!...I don't know ..just a personal opinion ...

Love the end mann... the main and tum thing.....
Lovely :)

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

o god..thz is one brilliant hindi verse.

Anonymous said...

nicely versed hindi poetry!
i liked the definations in the end!
keep writing!
regards...
riya

neha dhamija said...

hi dear
nice poetry
i was just abt to pin point same thing that Param said...Hai is repeated twice..or otherwise good work..keep going btw even ur version is good

Anonymous said...

lovely... very nice bro! i loved it..
really heart touching words..!

keep on doing the good work..!

Ann said...

AWESOME Pulkit !!

You write so well. That was soooo touchy.

priyanka said...

loved it ..............awesome ......god bless

priyanka said...

loved it pulkit .........enjoyed reading it it was awesome bhai

Escapist said...

Loved it !!!!



Jollieeess !!!

Dorothi said...

Awesome!! lovely and well versed!!
The song you quote at the end of the post is one of my favorites.Keep writing!!

PULKIT said...

@ phoenix - k! :) thanks for visit again... :) hope life is all fine at ur end dear!!

PULKIT said...

@ paramveer - got ur version dude! that too sound goood... me dont notice much when I scriblle in a flow... I am not any poet or something :P have said that so many times already :)

aur batao... whats up? hows life?

PULKIT said...

@ anurag - hey! m so happy to see ya here! :) I read and followed ur blog too... thanks for the comment! ur reconsideration of last line has very good bro, actually the Ho in the end signified the conclusion of the partner not being around...!! I wanted to emphasize on that

PULKIT said...

@ preetilata - thank u! :)

PULKIT said...

@ riya - thanks for the motivation sis!!

PULKIT said...

@ neha - thanks for the comments :) I will finish the pending reading work of ur blog today positively :)

PULKIT said...

@ pinkzz - thanks chweetu! tc sis!!

PULKIT said...

@ girl next door - thanks for the appreciation dear!
hope to see ya again here...
keep visiting! god bless!!

PULKIT said...

@ priya - thanks a lot sis! :)

PULKIT said...

@ priya - u know it that ur my strength...dont u? :) love ya loads !!

PULKIT said...

@ Escapist - welcome to my blog family dear :) thanks for comments and for being a follower too!!

PULKIT said...

@ dreamer - hey thanks for the appreciation pehle toh!
and secondly I am glad someone noticed the scribbled song in the end too!
me too love it yaar... its video was awesome and I am particularly I big fan of that fakir mantra album too!!

SatyU said...

ahaa..really very beautiful.

very touching one too :)